Weekend Workshop Saturday Edition

Still on my trip, slow baking in the heat, but never the less, I present for your edification Chapter Seven of Story Sense by Paul Lucey, Dramatization.

Drama is the intensification of the emotion you hope to inspire in your reader. You do this by making situations more desperate, more dangerous, more impossible, just more.

The dramatic engine is the most potent of all dramatizing strategies because it motivates the characters, determines action, dictates momentum, controls the intensity of the story, and focuses the drama. There are many engines available.

-The problem as engine: a dramatic problem that pulls opposing forces into conflict over how the issue will resolve.

-The villain as the engine: a powerful antagonist who creates desperate conflict.

-The hero as engine: the protagonist(s) is given a need, a task, or a situation that energizes them or forces them to take action.

-The system as the engine: an organization or a group that serves or corporate on institutional agenda. sinister. the hero will need to expose them.

-A force of nature as the engine: extraordinary natural force (think Jurassic Park, Outbreak, Alien)

-A Task or Quest as the Engine: challenges the hero to achieve a difficult goal or complete an impossible task. Closely bound to the dramatic problem. Encourages the writer to aggravate the problem so that it drives the story.

-The conventions or circumstances of the story as engine: certain genres come with a built in engine. Courtroom dramas, romances, crime stories.

Inventiveness and Engineering

Creatively insert anything you need into the world you have built but be sure to follow the rules you have set once you have set them. Research. Be patient. Keep working it over until it works.

Simple dramatic strategies:

-Obstacles: a character attempts something and is blocked or defeated. Usually deflects the plot into a new direction.

-The Power Tool: Usually appear once or twice to be recognized and present a spike of interest. (think the Force in Star Wars)

-Undeserved Suffering: Makes an audience care about an unjustly abused character. Humanizes when done correctly. Irritates when done in a whiny manner. Often more effective when someone other than the sufferer reveals the backstory.

-Reversals: good news turns to bad news or vice versa.

-Coincidence: something unexpected intrudes and turns the story in a new direction.

-Catalyst: incident, character, or emotional state that speeds up the plot or a relationship.

-Contrast: inequality between characters and/or setting.

-McGuffin: the mysterious device that sets the story in motion.

-The secret plan: the reader doesn’t know what has been planned by the characters but knows it is coming.

-Misunderstanding: characters misinterpret or fail to comprehend the situation

-The False Alarm: character in jeopardy but the threat turns out to be empty

-The reveal: a major plot point or character development point

-Planting and Payoff: introduce a character, location, or item that will later influence the story. It should be planted so it is noticed but does not call attention to itself.

-Lifelines: often provided by the planting, which saves the hero or allows him to win

Parallelism: two similar actions that are intercut to make a single story point.

Sentimentality versus Empathy

affected or extravagant emotion, sentimentality is. It’s unearned sappiness. The situation feels less than true.

Empathy is the evoking of identification with your character by the reader because the situation feels true. Often revealing motivation will assist with this process.

To keep things dramatic you must make you reader believe in the logic of the characters and what is happening while concealing the machinations of the plot which might hinder belief. The logic should be easy to spot in hindsight but blend seamless in the first reading.

Novels are more likely to fail for being too polite, too proper, too reasonable, than too over the top. Invest your energy, passion, and time in your novel.

Friday Fun: Wicked Fun

Greetings from my trip. I would like to call it a vacation but I read an article recently that was very clear: if you are on a trip with your child it is not a vacation. LOL. So let’s just call it taking the show on the road.

Speaking of road shows. Wednesday night I skipped write in and went out with some girlfriends. It was K’s birthday and we had dinner at the Tap Room and went to see Wicked at the Paramount Theater. About the Tap Room, hundreds of beers on tap. What I like, I don’t drink beer, is they have Wicked Baked Apple cider on tap. Yum! They also have an amazing Moscow Mule and mouth watering Calamari.

So on to the show. um….I really want to say I loved it. But I didn’t. The solo vocals were beautiful. Gorgeous voices, good lyrics. The ensemble vocals were less than stellar. I couldn’t understand the words and I wasn’t the only one.

The dancing. Oh god, the dancing. Fifty percent was turns, or spins if you want to be generous. Most of what came to mind was that Choreography scene from White Christmas where they are making fun of the loss of actual dancing in dance routines on stage. Yeah.

Moving on, the stage set was Awesome. Really intriguing construct of steel and screening.

The plot was good, but I did find myself thinking, all this over a guy, really?

Of course the sap in me was thrilled when Fierro and Elphaba sneak off together in the end to live in the spare castle together and in peace.

But still, all that over a boy. Laughing.

It is the last day of Camp Nanowrimo. I didn’t make goal. In fact, I don’t think I wrote the last three week on my spy novel. Ce la vie.

I am off with my friend to go to a Fusion class at her gym. With a little luck I won’t hurt anything important.

Monday Book Review: In Cold Blood

I finally read In Cold Blood by Truman Capote in the last two days. It’s been vaguely in the back of my mind for some time. It’s frequently referenced as amazing and the thing to read if you like true crime. I just hadn’t done it. I’m very much an organic reader. I read what I feel like reading when I feel like reading it. It just doesn’t work for me any other way. So I had been reading Wodehouse, all week, for review. The problem with Wodehouse is, he’s funny. And Friday I got some bad news. The last thing I wanted was funny. I wanted dark. Enter Capote.

I have to agree with practically everything I have ever read about In Cold Blood. It is beautifully written. The prose is outstanding, especially considering the topic. Capote weaves in source material which stands in sharp contrast the gorgeous crafted style Capote uses. His story flow is excellent. His pacing well executed.

He gives an even perspective of all concerned. Victims, perpetrators, detectives, and witnesses. He shows their positive attributes and their negative. He paints a fairly realistic picture. How dead to the truth it is one can little know, but I believe he conducted the interviews he says he did. If he spins it ever so slightly to make the story more readable, I’m comfortable with that, because I believe the substance.

In Cold Blood, is the story of four family members murdered in a small town. The entire town is sure it is one of them, the warmth and trust is gone. The criminals are also gone, off on a rampage of criminal “fun”. Capote tracks the tale from beginning, getting to know the victims, into the murders, through the investigation, the run, and finally the gallows swinging end. It is oddly not all that brutal, the way he writes it. Despite what I know must have been heinous. It flows by easily. Which is necessary for Capote to paint the bad guys with any positive qualities.

Would I recommend this book? No. Because I think if you like true crime, you’ve probably already read it. (Considering the number of holds on the book and how long it took for my number to come up, it’s still hopping popular some 50 years after publication.) And if you don’t like true crime, you won’t like it no matter how beautiful his prose.

℘℘℘℘ + I give 4 and 1/2 pages. I finished it in two sittings. But I doubt I will read anything else by Capote despite how much I liked this one.

Weekend Workshop Sunday Edition

As usual here are the exercises that go with Chapter 6 from Story Sense by Paul Lucey.

1. Screen the first act of a film or TV show and study it for its dialogue. Note when and how the dialogue reveals backstory, theme, characters, and relationship. When does the dialogue contain subtext? What is the nature of the subtext; backstory, situation, relationships, theme, or plot? Look at the non verbal part of the dialogue. How are the actors conveying this?

Watching NCIS, Season Four Episode 23.

Dead guy found in the back of a taxi on it’s way to NCIS by the guard at the Navy Yard entrance. Shock on the guards face. Open mouthed expression.

Gibbs watching video on the war in Iraq, Cynthia reminds him the files have to be reviewed by Friday, and tomorrow is Friday. (Talks with irritation.) Gibbbs replies I had a wife like you once Cynthia. Reveals back story on Gibbs-been married before, got divorced. Further conversation, reveals where the director is. Gibbs approves files because he knows the agent, rejects when he doesn’t know them.

The director calls, Gibbs refers to the “frog” a bad guy the director has been chasing the whole season. (Backstory.)

Ducky says it’s not often we get to walk to a crime scene. (Theme of the show. Death and detection.)

Jeanne calls Tony, she wants to buy a house. He is completely freaked out. (Relationships)

Tony and McGee joke about Tony not being a a boy scout and Tony having been a frat house wet tee shirt contest scout. (Backstory and personality)

Gibbs comments on every bit of conversation that occurred ostensibly out of ear shot. (Character)

the cab drive make multiple disparaging remarks about marriage in front of Tony.

Gibbs is dodging calls from Cynthia, he does hate a nagging woman. (This is clearly a theme of the episode, fearful scary marriage with nagging women.)

Abby and Ziva compare first time sex stories. Abby’s in a cab. Ziva in a weapons carrier. (Backstory and characters)

The names on the list, most of which are dead, Tony and Ziva are to look for the living ones to find a connection.

Cynthia wants Gibbs to take a call from the Yemen embassy, the dead guy having been identified as an embassy employee.  They send an attache. Who reveals the young man was very connected.

2. I skipped this one. It wanted me to act out a scene. No thanks. I have no acting chops.

3. Write a dialogue based on the following prompt.

-A man or a woman becomes tired of waiting for his or her lover to propose marriage. An ultimatum must be delivered “Marry me or I’ll marry my friend in Texas.” The person receiving the ultimatum is shaken but refuses to be pushed.

Catching sight of Steven, Maya rode slowly over to the fence on Salem her twelve year old trail horse. “Glad to see you’re back.” She leaned down to provide a perfunctory kiss. “It felt like you were gone for months.”

Steven shook his head slightly.

“Yes months!” Maya insisted.

Clearing his throat Steven said nothing.

“Did you miss me?” Maya slid from the saddle and opened the fence.

Giving a small smile, Steven slipped his hand under Maya’s elbow.

“I knew you missed me as much as I missed you.” Maya pounced. “Did you bring me anything?”

Steven sighed.

“Perhaps something in a small blue and silver box?” Maya giggled.

Steven chortled.

Maya stopped giggling abruptly. She whirled to face Steven. “You’re never going to marry me, are you?”

Steven sighed heavily.

“If you don’t want to marry me, just say so. I can always marry my friend in Texas.”

“That might be for the best.” Steven’s voice remained even.

“How could you say that? Don’t you love me?” Maya demanded.

Steven sighed heavily again and very quietly under his breath replied, “Not so much.”

Maya pretended not to hear him. “I’m serious, if you don’t marry me soon, I’ll go to Texas.”

Steven opened the door and gently propelled Maya in from where she had been enjoying some yard time. It was like this every day with her. He scanned her bracelet and walked her over to the group therapy room. Steven wondered why they bothered with this one, it wouldn’t do her any good. It never had, all these years, not one bit.

Weekend Workshop Saturday Edition

Good morning my fellow writers and readers! This Saturday I’ll summarize Chapter 6 from Story Sense by Paul Lucey.

Chapter Six: Dialogue and Character

As I have stated before some of Lucey’s points really only apply to scripts but some advice translates no matter what format your are writing in.

-Characters should say things that advance the story while revealing a little about who they are.

-One way to work on dialogue is to listen to what people say and how they say it while speaking in real life. Be alert to accents, emotional content, tension, rhythms, and the unspoken subtext behind the spoken words.

-Be careful how much your dialogue is visible. How much does it call attention to its own cleverness which will take the reader out of the story? Flowery language, wise sayings, word plays, puns, metaphors are examples that might break a reader from the story.

-If you wish to avoid swearing (and Lucey highly advises it), play around with inventing a language style that implies things negatively without leaning on standard cuss words or derogatory terms. You old barnacle buffer.

-Strip your dialogue of conventional conversational chaff like ah, uh, um, you know, and well, like.

-The strongest punch to the statement should come at the end.

-Watch your background dumping disguised as conversation. Too many names, dates, and places at once bump the reader from the story. Marble your exposition, trickle it in.

-Situations with drama, positive personal chemistry, time pressure, or negative personal chemistry should have dialogue filled with subtext that reflects the situation. It should not explain everything, but should instead create shadows and mystery.

-A particular way of speaking reveals a lot about a character. The writer must understand the characters back story and demonstrate this content through the speech and behavioral patterns. Characters are revealed by what they say and how they say it, by life experiences that are revealed through action and dialogue, and by values that are expressed through action as characters meet the challenges of the plot.

-Sluggish dialogue stops the story as it dawdles over petty details and does not present conflict, subtext, or drama that connects to the characters emotionally.

-Strategies are meant as path markers as writers stumble along in an effort to know the truth of their characters so well the characters are alive and multi level dialogue occurs naturally from the characters and reflects their emotions rather than the writers.

Heavy thought, that. Allow the characters space to be themselves. Sort of like having kids, you have to shape them gently but ultimately allow them the space to figure out who they want to be.

Friday Fun

There is no fun in whoville today. And there hasn’t been in at least a week. I am not writing on my spy novel. It’s sitting forlorn and abandoned. It just isn’t fun to write and I’ve heard if it wasn’t fun to write it won’t be fun to read. So it sits.

Technically I’m justifying this lack of writing by researching for it. LOL. A book I wanted eons ago came in at the library and I’m slogging my way through a badly written SAS handbook. But I know and you know, it’s just my way of avoiding writing.

And today I’m ok with that. I will finish this damn spy novel…just maybe not this month. Chalk up a loss for Camp Nanowrimo 2015.

Have you ever shelved a book fifty times and finally managed to finish it and be happy with the final product? Do tell.

Finally…a rating system

I know it took me long enough but I’ve been busier than a one legged man in an …. well you get the picture.

I thought considerably about a book review rating system and even used ever so kind Skye‘s system as a starting point.

One page (℘): I couldn’t slog my way through this mess if I had a machete.

Two Pages(℘℘): I finished it but only out of sheer stubbornness.

Three Pages(℘℘℘): It was readable. Shrug. Nothing more, Nothing Less. I read fifty pages a day.

Four Pages(℘℘℘℘): That was good. Really Good. I was happy to find time to read it, often completing more than my 50 pages a day.

Five Pages(℘℘℘℘℘): Loved this book. Read it in one sitting. Will look at other things this author has written.

Six Pages(℘℘℘℘℘℘): Ignored the people in my life or was severely irritated when I had to stop reading this book to help them. Note: did not actually put the book down for anything. I’m grudgingly writing this review right now because I would rather be on my way to the library to pick up everything else they have written before someone else gets there first.

What do you think? Let’s try this out for a while and see how it flies.

Monday Book Review: The Will To Kill

I just finished The Will to Kill: Making Sense of Senseless Murder by James Alan Fox and Jack Levin. I picked this one up on the spur of the moment, thinking it might be good research for my upcoming Nano novel. It was in fact excellent research.

Unlike The Sociopath Next Door, Fox and Levin pack this short read with real evidence, statistics, and only a smidge of their own analysis. They fictionalize nothing. They aim to deliver a straight forward narrative which presents the facts on senseless murders including school shootings, work places shootings, other mass murder, serial killers, family annihilators, hate crimes, etc.

They discuss changes in crime, it’s gone down by the way, pretty much across the board since the 80s. They discuss changes in crime related law especially in the areas of insanity and juvenile crime. I very much enjoyed all the studies they included which were properly cited regarding the nature of crime. Did you know that serial killers are much more likely to be white males in their late twenties and early thirties(84-95% depending on the study), their victims are likely to be white females(80%). Did you know 20% of serial killers operate in teams and that these teams are more likely to torture their victims than a serial killer operating alone?

I have only one bone to pick with this work. Ok, two bones. First, it’s dry. Like Antarctica dry. But given the heavy statistical nature of the work, I can overlook that.

Second, in the section on hate crime they start with some statistics for a given set of years. Anti-black, Anti-gay, and anti-white hate crimes were about tied in numbers (29, 33, 27) but when they give examples, a dozen stories not tied to domestic terrorism, only one is about an anti-white crime. Seems rather biased. I don’t know if this is an issue with the authors or one of the media saturated world they are writing in. But it bothered me. If it’s happening, and I have no reason to disbelieve the statistics they provided, then let’s talk about it. All of it.

I took copious notes. I don’t know how much use the statistics will be come November but the general characteristics will build my serial killer nicely. Guess he’ll be white, male, young, and reasonably uneducated. Too bad I’m going to flaunt the law of averages and make his victims male.

Weekend Workshop Sunday Edition

Story Sense, by Paul Lucey, Chapter 5 Exercises. CBS-Loses-10-NCIS-Death-Lawsuit (2)

In keeping with the chapter this week, these exercises are all about characters and considering their psychological imperatives. The assignment was to select a male and a female character and figure what makes them tick. Based on my current binge watching of NCIS before bed at night, I have chosen, Leroy Jethro Gibbs and Ziva David. (I seriously considered Abby Shiuto, but I feel like her back story is severely limited and I would be pressed to invent answers to many of these questions. Although that might have been fun, it would have defeated the purpose.)

1. What created the psychological imperatives that drive the two characters? What is the nature of each character’s short term trauma or long term conditioning?

I feel like both of them are driven by a powerful need to do the right thing at all times to compensate for when they have done the “wrong thing” in the past. I quote wrong thing because it all depends on your point of view. Gibbs is still living with the trauma of losing his wife and daughter and the murder he committed in revenge. Ziva was conditioned to put Israel and family first and was forced to kill her brother, Ari to prevent greater disasters. There is an additional emotional imperative driving Ziva which is more complicated. She seems to be desperate to have Gibbs acknowledge her as more than just another member of his team. She needs to be special to him. A replacement father for the one she betrayed by killing Ari.

2. How is the imperative displayed by the characters?

Gibbs has a long list of very specific rules which govern his world. He does not make these rules easily accessible, but instead forces his team to learn by example, thereby justifying his continued necessity in the world. (he has only NCIS). When Gibbs is in the hospital with amnesia, Ziva is the only member of the team who breaks the directors orders to go see him and what she choses to try to get him to remember her is the death of Ari. She is desperate to have her sacrifice appreciated.

3. Assign sociological influences and life experiences that might have affected the characters.

Gibbs-small town upbringing, military service as a Marine, multiple combat theaters, military life, purple heart, death of wife and daughter, 15 years at NCIS, several in service overseas and undercover.

Ziva- Israeli, lost sister to Hamas bombing, raised by Mossad, member of Mossad, service undercover and in multiple countries, incredibly well honed killing machine.

4. What are the characters most afraid of? How does the psychological imperative create needs in the characters?

Gibbs is most afraid of losing someone he cares about, again. He therefore insulates himself to care only about those he works with, an interesting proposition because they are both more likely to be lost due to the nature of their work and more likely to survive if he trains them well enough. This creates his need to train them to perfection.

Ziva is afraid she will have to kill someone she knows/cares about again. She is essentially afraid she cannot trust others. As a result she needs the people she perceives as most trust worthy to trust her.

5. Are the characters pursuing what they need or what they want? Explain.

Ziva-doesn’t know what she wants. She operates on a very basic level for the most part. She has pulled in her head like a turtle in response to the traumas she has seen or done and simply lives on autopilot. She admits little in the way of feelings. But she is learning and adapting, which is what she needs to do if she does not want to be a cold assassin her whole life.

Gibbs-pursuing what he wants. He needs therapy to deal with the death of his wife and daughter, and the death sentence he carried out on the perpetrator without the benefit of judge and jury. But therapy would change Gibbs, which would change the show. So let’s be happy he continues to compulsively work and drink to drown his sorrows otherwise who would protect Ziva, Tony, McGee, Abby, Ducky, the navy, the marines, the world at large. 🙂

Weekend Workshop Saturday Edition

Still working from Story Sense by Paul Lucey, Chapter 5: Creating Emotionally Dimensional Characters.

Per Lucey, we must imagine interesting characters before we can write them. (!) The process of imagining involves refining ordinary day dreaming until it conjures characters and settings that come to life. One should strive to create characters so intense, they come alive, break free from you as the author, and take over the story. Lucey calls this one of the joys of writing. I agree.

Imagination is like a muscle, you need to work it to grow it. No Pain, no Gain. The pain comes from the effort of trying to imagine a scene that refuses to happen in your mind. The gain is of course a scene that works. You also need imagination to know when a scene is useful or when it should be reworked or even tossed from the novel.

Lucey recommends spending as much effort on prepping the setting as you need to make the characters really live, as much detail as you need to bring the dramatic possibility to life. Research. Draw out the entire layout of a location or map of your world if that will help you fix things in reality.

There are many characters available for each role in your work. Audition them. Place them in the “empty chair” and grill them until the answers come to you. If they are who you want “cast them” in your novel, otherwise, say thanks but no thanks and move on. If you care about your creations, appreciate their problems, love their individual quirks, you will soon know them, who they are and what they can contribute to your story.

A good character needs:

-a history

-emotional baggage

-principles they are willing to defend or bend (as suits your tale)

-flaws

-emotional content (are they moody, funny, sappy?)

-needs that are not being met

-psychological imperative (a reason they do what they do)

A sense of how the human mind works can really help with developing characters that function in the world you have written for them. I won’t give a psychological 101 on the spot. Go to the library. Read up a bit. (I have read or am in the process of reading several books about sociopaths and abnormal psyche for this November’s Nanowrimo.) A common theme is the blind spot. Most people have one. That place where what you want over shadows what you actually need so that you act in a self defeating manner, without seeing it.

Again I will emphasize (Lucey mentions it in passing), give your minor characters a solid base. Don’t just throw them in as foils for your main character to play off of. Nanowrimo has a list of the fifty things you should be able to answer for your main character and know so well you don’t even have to think before answering. But your minor characters deserve as much as well. Check the questionnaire out here.

I’ll leave you with this bit of gossip from Lucey, which I did invest a bit of time to check out and find it more or less accurate, or as accurate as one can be when dealing with the foibles of man. William Faulkner (yes, that Faulkner) apparently was so desperate to have been a pilot in World War I, that he pretended to be British to enlist in the Royal Flying Corps in Toronto(he was too short for the US to take him) and when the war ended before he completed his training, he still pretended to have flown and crashed, using a cane and walking with a limp. People do inexplicable things that make sense to them even if the rest of us don’t understand. As a writer it’s our job to make it understandable.