So, as the last post from Story Sense, I submit for your review my back of the book blurb.

It’s kind of a pitch, I guess. But I really need to work it over and clean it up before publication. So I am posting for you, my favorite readers, to hack apart with criticism and commentary.

Demobbed from service, rich enough not to need to work, and bored with post World War II London, Molly chances upon a movie poster showcasing the young soldier she gave her heart to in France. Desperate to reconnect with him, she schemes her way onto the movie set where he is staring in the lead role. Molly is certain they will live happily ever after. And they just might. But first Molly has to figure out who she is and what she wants before she can get her happy ending. And she does it all while trying to keep her seams straight. 

There’s something wrong here. It sounds flat. Not at all the funny romp I mean it to be. Hrm…Thoughts?