Weekend Workshop Sunday Edition

I realize capitalization is pretty easy but it does tie nicely into the idea of specificity in your writing. So for the exercises, let’s a very specific sentence/paragraph and then remove all the specifics.

The Greenes had move to Manteo in November. The weather was fine throughout winter and spring, but when school let out in June, the heat wrapped Roanoke Island in the shroud of perpetual humidity. The only relief came between five and eight o’clock in the morning, when an Atlantic breeze blew in from the Outer Banks. -Roland Smith, Jack’s Run

Without the specifics:

They moved to the town in the fall. The weather was fine for a while, but then it got hot and humid. The only relief came early in the morning and late at night when a breeze came in from the ocean.

What a change. Do you even care about the story anymore? I certainly don’t. Putting that book down and giving it a one ℘ review for the blog.

Weekend Workshop Saturday Edition

I realize this is quite basic, capitalization, but my husband and I went round a few times about how it works in actuality. Jeff Anderson, Everyday Editing, lists it out:

Proper nouns, proper adjectives, titles, first word of a direct quotation, and titles used before a person’s name.

But what makes things specific enough to capitalize? Capitalized words denote specificity. A shift to less specific nouns causes a change in tone and voice.

Anderson provides a great example:

The original: Lucky Trimble crouched in a wedge of shade behind the Dumpster. Her ear near a hole in the paint-chipped wall of Hard Pan’s Found Object Wind Chime Museum and Visitor Center, she listened as Short Sammy told the story of how he hit rock-bottom.

Without specificity: A girl crouched in a wedge of shade behind the thing. Her ear near a hole in the paint-chipped wall of the place, she listened as a man told the story of how he hit rock-bottom.

Lack of specificity definitely changes the feel.

A quick example: oak. It’s a specific kind of tree. Should it be capitalized? No. It’s still a generic type of tree, not a specific oak tree.

Where hubby and I ran into trouble is with things like christening. Should it be capitalized? Turns out not. (I was right. LOL)

As always, exercises tomorrow.

Ain’t that always the way….

It has been the craziest week. Seriously.

Last weekend my girlfriend was here. I took her to the airport on Sunday and then went out to dinner with a book club who wants to do a Q&A with the author for my book. Then I went back to the airport to pick up my Father in Law who decided to pop by. LOL

I briefly considered taking a part time job as a personal chef but the kiddo was adamantly opposed. Given that I would need to take him with me, that was a deal breaker.

I finished the changes to my cover. Finished editing my proof. Uploaded all my changes. Jumping up and down.

Then I got to set up my royalty information.

It is so close. So close, I have butterflies constantly right now.

My postcard for marketing is about half done. Ok the front it done and I am happy with it. LOL. The back on the other hand….um let’s not talk about that.

I have four stops for my virtual book tour. I really want more. But beggars can’t be choosers right.

So today I am going out of town for the weekend, without my hubby and kiddo. And this morning my son woke up with a cold. Ain’t that always the way? LOL

Virtual Book Tour

I talked a lot about Norwescon earlier this year. It was an amazing wealth of knowledge. I hit every writer track seminar I could manage, pulling a few 12 hour days. But it was totally worth it.

One of the things that really stuck with me was how many of the indie and self published authors were talking about Virtual Book Tours. It’s a throw back to the days when a major publisher would send an author with a new book out on a physical tour to book stores for readings/signings, to radio shows for interviews, etc.

So what does a Virtual Book Tour look like? Well, you “tour” your favorite blogs. The blog host posts up an excerpt of the book launching and whatever else makes them happy. An interview. A game of 20 questions suggested by readers. Some blog hosts like to read the book in advance and give a review.

It sounds like lots of fun to me. And a bit of a win-win. The author posts all the locations they’ll be touring, driving their readers to the host blogs. And of course the author gains new readers from the host blogs.

What do you think? Would you like to see interviews and excerpts on my blog from authors about to publish?

Posting on a Tuesday must be a sign of something serious…

and it is.

If you’ve taken a gander at my homepage lately, you’ll see that little count down clock. My novel is coming. Tick tock, tick tock.

Things actually look fabulous. I think there was a glitch in scrivener and my last changes and edits didn’t get saved before it got exported. So all the mistakes I found in the last pages were not a harbinger of doom. LOL.

So why am I posting on Tuesday?

I am trying to organize a virtual book tour for the weeks before my novel launches and after it launches. I spent considerable time checking everyone who follows me and contacting those who had a contact button.

If you didn’t hear from me but think it might be fun to host a stop on my virtual book tour, contact me. I’d love to work it out.

Monday Book Review: King Leopold’s Ghost

It’s rare that I read a book I liked so very much and yet find myself hard pressed to come up with words to talk about it. King Leopold’s Ghost, subtitled A Story of Greed, Terror, and Heroism in Colonial Africa, by Adam Hochschild, is a powerful, detailed reading of one man’s ability to wield awesome power amassing an amazing fortune, killing roughly ten million people in the process.

But wait, I hear your brain asking…..ten million people is practically genocide, how have I heard nothing about this?

Again I say awesome power.

King Leopold II of Belgium wanted a colony of his own. Not for Belgium, no, for himself. He saw the potential to make unheard of millions out of a colony. All the big kids were doing it after all; France, Germany, Great Britain, United States….Heck even the little kids; Dutch, Portuguese, and Spanish were dabbling in colonialism. Using a blend of bribery, flattery, and pure lies Leopold got his hands on the Congo, well he named it that. The Independent State of the Congo, was it’s full christened name. Leopold promised things to everyone, got signatures of deeds of lands from people who did not read French, and the press tauted his humanitarian efforts to civilize the savage.

Long story short. He actually used forced labor to steal all the ivory that could be found and then to garner rubber. I know a fortune made of rubber, who knew. Forced labor was just a bit different in the Congo. Men were told to work and to ensure they did, their wives and children were taken hostage. Workers and hostages were NOT fed. It is estimated at the peak, men had to devote 25 days per month working for the rubber effort. Villages that tried to rebelled were slaughtered and their right hands cut off as proof. In some cases other bits were removed, I won’t get specific but men, go ahead and cross your legs.

Few who went to the Congo said much. Either they enjoyed the life or they had no idea what to do. Joseph Conrad went out as a steam ship captain and canceled his contract after just one trip up the river and into the interior. He wrote Heart of Darkness upon his return to England. You can learn volumes about where he got his ideas. Hochschild explains the people Conrad met in Congo and what they are on record as doing, row of skulls ringing your garden anyone?

One black missionary attempted to shed light on the situation but as his own past was not quite, quite, he was disgraced in the papers and Leopold reigned on. Another man who ran a prominent paper, was fond of traveling with his mistress. Leopold invited him to see the gardens at the royal castle. The man attended with his mistress and a lovely time was had by all. Leopold thought he had a convert. Until the man continued to publish detrimental articles about Leopold and the Congo. So Leopold had a large flower arrangement sent to his home. The card read, in remembrance of Mr and Mrs newspaperman’s visit to the royal gardens.

Finally, finally, enter E.D. Morel. He was a shipping clerk for the shipping company with a monopoly to carry goods into or out of Congo. Because Morel spoke English and French, he was chosen to go to Brussels and verify the shipments. It didn’t take him long to realize the quantity of rubber coming out of the Congo was 10 times greater than the goods going back in. To him this meant slavery. How else could one procure so many exports at the cost of so few imports. He brought the situation to the attention of his superiors who ignored him. So he quit. And he began to agitate full time for change in the Congo. The louder he shouted the more people whispered facts he could use.

Leopold would burn all of the official government record of the Congo before he turned it over to the Belgian government in response to pressure by Morel and his efforts. “I will give them my Congo but they have no right to know what I did there.” Snort. Let’s sum it up shall we, in the Mongo language “to send someone to harvest rubber” is an idiom meaning “to tyrannize.”

℘℘℘℘ – between four and five pages. It wasn’t the sort of book one can read in one sitting. It is heavy material. But it’s really well written. And I’m a firm believer if we don’t learn about what happened in the past, it will happen again in the future. Forewarned is forearmed.

Weekend Workshop Sunday Edition

I love a comment Anderson makes in the colon chapter. “When I imitate other writer’s sentences, trying on their style, I don’t use the same content as the writer. I try their structure or the way they put their sentence together.”

Let’s play with the sentence from Hiaasen yesterday.

_____ told me to empty my _____:______, _______, and ______.

The TSA agent told me to empty my bag: my kindle, my laptop, and a sippy cup of water.

Use the sentence to free write a 100 word short.

The TSA agent told me to empty my bag: my kindle, my laptop, and a sippy cup of water. No wonder I set off the bells and whistles. The agent takes the water over to a special machine which analyses the content. She clears the contents of danger and returned the sippy cup to my kiddo. I apologized profusely for forgetting the water was in the bottom of the bag but the agent was quite tetchy with me. I stepped to the side to wait for my husband who once again was being checked for explosives. Every time he flew. I wondered for the 100th time about the nature of random.

Reexamine your 100 words for where you can add more detail.

The TSA agent told me to empty my bag: my kindle, my laptop, and a sippy cup of water. No wonder I set off the bells and whistles. The agent took the water over to a special machine which analyzed the content. She cleared the contents of danger and returned the sippy cup to my kiddo. I apologized profusely for forgetting the water was in the bottom of the bag but the agent was quite tetchy with me. I stepped to the side to wait for my husband who once again was being checked for explosives. Every time he flew. I wondered for the 100th time about the nature of random.

Eh, I fixed a few tense issues but my brain refuses to find anywhere to add stuff. hrm….

Post your own examples in the comments if you like.

Weekend Workshop Saturday Edition

Colons. Say What?

According to Jeff Anderson in Everyday Editing, colons:

-can introduce lists. (ahhhh)

-colons emphasize to the reader that something important will follow.

-A colon can also introduce a complete sentence.

Don’t confuse the semicolon with the colon. The semicolon is used to join separate sentences we want to join without a coordinating conjunction.

Examples from Anderson.

Reluctantly, one by one, Hugo pulled out dozens of objects: screws and nails and bits of metal, gears and crumpled playing cards, tiny pieces of clockworks, cogs, and wheels. -Brian Selznick, The Invention of Hugo Cabret

Before I do anything else, I need to go back over everything that has happened this summer: the Big Mistake, the old man, the book, the lamp, the telescope, and this box, which started it all. -Wendy Mass, Jeremy Fink and the Meaning of Life

The deputy told me to empty my pockets: two quarters, a penny, a stick of bubble gum, and a roll of grip tape for my skateboard. -Carl Hiaasen, Flush

A dash can do the same job as a colon. You can use a dash whenever you please, there are not the same rules that surround the colon.

Tune in tomorrow for some exercises surrounding the colon.

Friday Fun – Woot, Woot, Woot

My proof came in the mail last night. I was so excited I practically threw the other mail at my girlfriend Patty who was walking my dog with me so I could rip open the cardboard packaging.

It is beautiful. I was so happy last night.

Today on the other hand…

I have been told my font is too hard to read for my title. Bleh.

And then I started going through things, from the back, one sentence at a time backwards (I’m explaining it badly but it is a viable editing method.) and I keep finding mistakes. Crapola. Pardon my language.

So back to editing. It has rather taken the bloom off having a copy in mScripting the Truth Front Covery hand. LOL

My countdown meter reminds me three weeks to launch. Eek. So to tantalize you a bit….Here is the front cover….what do you think about the font for the title?

Wednesday Writer’s Cafe – Denied

I didn’t get to go play tonight. I had to attend a mandatory parent orientation meeting at his home school coop. 122 kids go there. Not bad for a little grass roots coop.

Anyway, where I am at….

My physical proof is on it’s way from Create Space. I am super excited for it to get here next Tuesday.

In the back of my head I know I need to be pulling all the elements together for my post cards but I just haven’t found the time. Everything the kiddo does for school outside the home, started this week and it has left me wore.

I have prepped my lecture for Saturday’s seminar, North Bend Library at 1030 AM. Topic: Nanowrimo success and how to pull that off.

Can I just circle back to my proof is on it’s way? My completed physical novel, that I wrote, is on it’s way. AGHHHHHHHHHHHH!

Ok sorry about that. Back to normal here. No, no, I’m not. My novel is coming, my novel is coming, my novel is coming. Three weeks and 2 days til launch.